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楠都月
先戴個頭盔： 我只會給很簡單的評價，也可能有很直接的評價，請不要介意！
4 hours agoReply
楠都月
謝謝你的詳細評價！ 我稍後也會來看大大的作品的：）
4 hours agoReply
楠都月
節奏方面我可能因為想寫回憶部分就會有點跳，但後面的部分應該好一些了，不會很快有場景變換問題。
4 hours agoReply
楠都月
沒事 很高興你來給評價！ 名詞解釋那部分我也想過有沒必要更早解釋，但總覺得會有點影響到敍事節奏，就採用了讓故事發展就會慢慢展開世界觀的設定。
4 hours agoReply
芙
了解了！ 好像很多作者也這樣寫
反倒是一開始先補世界觀被噴是什麼倒設定型跟意識流寫法⋯⋯有點難過🥲
4 hours agoReply
楠都月
@芙,🥹🥹🥹 我覺得各有各好哎 
沒必要針對這一點。
4 hours agoReply
芙
@楠都月,謝謝你ww
4 hours agoReply
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