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車有木
感謝參加，以下為我的一些感想，非專業評論，看看便可：

以七言律詩而言，對仗還算工整，碧、筆鋒、含煙等詞用得很精準與唯美，頗有古詩的美感，流露出清晰的筆法和畫面。

我也有創作過七言律詩，個人會喜歡循古法而用新詞，因此這篇我很喜歡，尤其第三句：上半句利用七個帶「雨」偏旁的字，描寫夏日陣雨時的畫面；下半句則利用七種顏色，描寫雨過天晴懸於半空的彩虹，令畫面如臨眼前。
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