Pretty good first chapter. The legend gets set up and we learn Kirsi is a Winter Lily. A suggestion I would make for the rewrite you said you were planning would be to rework how many people you introduce. I had a very difficult time remembering who was who and what age they all were. There were a lot of names introduced. I would avoid naming anyone who doesn't really play much of a role in the story and instead refer to them in general terms. The characters we do need to know about who do play a role in the story, I would try to find a way to introduce them in a way that distinguishes them better so that it's easier to remember who they are.

Beyond that, this was some solid writing. Some really great descriptions. I especially liked the description at the very beginning. It really painted the opening scene perfectly in my mind. Great job so far. The plot sounds intriguing and may be something I could get into. Will have to check out the next chapter soon. :)