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Atarah Asher
There were some minor grammatical errors but overall I really enjoyed this piece. (I myself struggle with spelling tremendously.) The overarching message was portrayed rather well through the eyes of a bird with limited understanding. It suits the concept to have the point of view be limited in knowledge.
Mia Flame
Aww thank you!! Do you mind saying where the errors are? I wrote this piece like two years ago and have yet to go back through it now that i have improved my skill.
Atarah Asher
There aren't very many areas. The main thing I caught was starting sentences with conjunctions. It's considered not grammatically correct, however, when I reread it today that could be done intentionally in this perspective. @Mia Flame,
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