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Very nice and spooky. I like that it's not certain if the problem is the doll or something else that has been stalking around unseen for years. I also liked how the character doesn't realize they've been scratched up until their mother points it out. That's a nice touch.

I'm not sure what the time limit was for the contest, but the one thing I will say is that the story could have benefitted from some more proofreading and editing. The story was great, but the structure of some of the sentences was a little awkward.

Overall, great piece! I enjoyed reading it! :)

3 years agoReply

N.W

Thank you, i might make a little project out of that little number see if i can improve it. Im glad ypu liked it and i apprciate the feedback :D

3 years agoReply

@Mini scribbles , Absolutely! Anytime. :)

I definitely think this would be worth expanding into something larger. It has all the right elements to it, and could make a great horror story.

3 years agoReply

N.W

@Jay Ellis, i reallt appreciate the advice thnk you!

3 years agoReply

@Mini scribbles ooooh very good! Super creepy :P Im gonna have trouble sleeping tonight! XDXD

3 years agoReply

N.W

Thank you!! I thought id put soemtbing remated to some things i experienced in the past XD

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