Loved this piece of work. Like Gill mentioned earlier though the grammar is definitely something that should be improved upon. Also, I find in stories it's best to always type things out in the past tense... I'm not sure why, but it's a piece of information that my good friend and editor Lester told me. So I am passing it on to you. That being said though I must give you props... I couldn't write a slice of life piece like this right now. Nicely done
There is great potential in this story, but the English needs some tightening up and some tweaking. Not sure about the ending -not because I don't like a twist in a story, but because "The only mistake he had done (made would be better) was that he had started loving himself." doesn't gel with what he had been learning through the friends he had made. Try out some alternative endings. One might involve cutting to where Sara abandoned her friendship… perhaps an arranged marriage cut her off?