Your premise is interesting, even though it is simple, and caught my eye along with the cover, but your writing needs a bit of work.
The first paragraph isn't properly separated when a different person is speaking, although thankfully this problem doesn't persist. The descriptions are very simple, almost nonexistent, and the transitions are wonky and harm the reader's emersion. This feels less like a chapter of a novel and more like a script, especially with its short length. If that's what you're going for, great! But if not then you really need to revise this chapter and the others if they're in a similar vein.
A first chapter is supposed to settle us in the story, and in the world. I find myself with little information about the world in this chapter. I know the basics about the main character, and her mother, and the forest, but really nothing else. WHO is the main character's mother? WHO is the main character themselves? Where exactly do they live? What does it look like and if it's a town, how does its society function? What's THEIR opinion on the forest? Describe, detail, and show, don't tell. Emerse me in the world.
My biggest advice to you besides of course practice, practice, and practice, is to read a lot. I mean a LOT. Study each book's writing style. Study how they use language and how they describe their setting. Then incorperate that into your own writing.
I hope i didn't come across as mean or anything! TvT I just want to help you improve. Don't be discouraged! We all have to start out somewhere! Do your best!
The first paragraph isn't properly separated when a different person is speaking, although thankfully this problem doesn't persist. The descriptions are very simple, almost nonexistent, and the transitions are wonky and harm the reader's emersion. This feels less like a chapter of a novel and more like a script, especially with its short length. If that's what you're going for, great! But if not then you really need to revise this chapter and the others if they're in a similar vein.
A first chapter is supposed to settle us in the story, and in the world. I find myself with little information about the world in this chapter. I know the basics about the main character, and her mother, and the forest, but really nothing else. WHO is the main character's mother? WHO is the main character themselves? Where exactly do they live? What does it look like and if it's a town, how does its society function? What's THEIR opinion on the forest? Describe, detail, and show, don't tell. Emerse me in the world.
My biggest advice to you besides of course practice, practice, and practice, is to read a lot. I mean a LOT. Study each book's writing style. Study how they use language and how they describe their setting. Then incorperate that into your own writing.
I hope i didn't come across as mean or anything! TvT I just want to help you improve. Don't be discouraged! We all have to start out somewhere! Do your best!