I feel like reviews should be helpful, so I'll offer some of my thoughts. I found some tense switches, which you could fix pretty easily. Don't fret; I find those in almost every story I've read on these sites. Also, your main character seemed to be a guy, but I found his personality to be a bit more feminine than was maybe intended. That very well could have been my own fault, however. I'm a bit drifty today...
Overall, great job! The story was good, and you interpreted the song well; you didn't make it so painstakingly obvious which lyrics it referred to within the story, yet I could tell how it related. Nicely done, and thanks for contributing to the contest!
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I feel like reviews should be helpful, so I'll offer some of my thoughts. I found some tense switches, which you could fix pretty easily. Don't fret; I find those in almost every story I've read on these sites. Also, your main character seemed to be a guy, but I found his personality to be a bit more feminine than was maybe intended. That very well could have been my own fault, however. I'm a bit drifty today...
Overall, great job! The story was good, and you interpreted the song well; you didn't make it so painstakingly obvious which lyrics it referred to within the story, yet I could tell how it related. Nicely done, and thanks for contributing to the contest!
~Raine