I really like your story and your writing style. This is the most capturing story I have found on here thusfar. The only thing I found confusing was the pick pocketer and the note. The mention of a note kind of came out of nowhere. Maybe do a better transition? Like: He noticed thie pick pocketer was different. Rather than trying to simply steal something from Alex's pocket, he was trying to slip a piece of paper in there inconspicuously. Strange... then go into the dialogue. Anyway, very charming story