Yeah, I would actually recommend reading it here because it's better edited than the Wattpad version, though has less chapters. XD regardless, thanks for reading! :D
I really like the dialogue! It feels really natural, and each character seems to have a distinct voice so far. I like Hayley's perspective, though she stereotypes a lot. :/ It's good for making her a realistic character with flaws, I guess.
Your writing is actually really good. There were a few mistakes, but I'll just suggest some edits because they were probably just typos.
Anyway! I look forward to reading the next chapter. :)
Thank you for the comment and for the edits (it's not often I get any feedback for my writing :/) I'm glad you liked it, too! Yeah, I accidentally overlooked those mistakes but thank you so much for the suggestions! :D
By the way, this is a really great beginning! :D
Your writing is actually really good. There were a few mistakes, but I'll just suggest some edits because they were probably just typos.
Anyway! I look forward to reading the next chapter. :)