That was so interesting! I really want to know their history, why she murdered the other girl, you have so many bread crumbs that it left the reader wanting more!
I was kinda going with the whole mysterious air thing, maybe I went too far. Honestly, nothing I wrote seemed to work here, so I just left it for you fill in the blanks or something.
I like it :D I have so many problems working with POVs and you pulled it off really well! If you don't mind me asking, where are you from? I'm an American, but you probably already figured that out ^-^
I really like this. The tone is very dreery and the languange you used in story support the tone of this story perfectly. It almost reminds me of a teen slasher flick with the way you describe things and the way you go about narrating the victim's killing.
I'm looking forward to reading more of this. Maybe a more peaceful death next time? Or maybe something even more violent? Who knows.
I have so many problems working with POVs and you pulled it off really well! If you don't mind me asking, where are you from? I'm an American, but you probably already figured that out ^-^
I'm looking forward to reading more of this. Maybe a more peaceful death next time? Or maybe something even more violent? Who knows.