I think this can be a good story. You have included many characters! But I think you can provide more details/background about all the characters as you develop the story. Look forward to see how the story is related to the 15 hypothetical separated villages (great imagination!)
Aw, thank you! And yes, I'm slowly adding details to make the readers want to stay and find out what happened. I already wrote 11 chapters, and I'm working on the 12th as we speak. Oh, and the imagination part? Thanks, I learn from lots of people! :D