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Haunting and morbid, I love it. Though I feel as if there could be more to this. The Good Doctor character could be expanded upon in many more ways. I did feel there was some awkwardness in the grammar here and there, but they did not retract from the overall work.

I want to know why this was though, why the situation was happening, was it a serial killing? Who is Mr. Heins and how did he end up here? I want to know more which is the best thing for you as a writer to do for me as a reader.
Keep up the good work!

9 years agoReply

Shay Nioum

Yes, I had been planning to revise it some and you gave me the perfect place to start. Although the main things about theses one-shots is that it's going to leave questions unanswered, since really in the past I'm not that good at having an ongoing chapter series. However if you would be kind enough or if you want to, could you beta read it? Just to fix any grammatical errors that I've made.

9 years agoReply

@Shay Nioum, No problem, just invite me as a Beta or send me a doc invite on google.docs

9 years agoReply

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