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希斯
先謝謝如此快速的JU。

文中有些地方沒有逗號，在閱讀時很難理解哪裡需要休息，且句子會無法連貫在一起。

宿心是很悲哀的兇手，她從別人的話語了解子承。不過往霸凌的方向描寫是正確的，子承是受傷了，但由於是因為宿心的角度看不見，而無法更深入瞭解整件事的脈絡。

原本我以為是用倒裝敘述，但似乎處理的不明顯，多多少少能夠了解帶給讀者「宿心的主觀。」
6 years agoReply
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