There is an ease in how you tell the story in this perspective. I admire that. Though I have to reread some parts after passing by them because of how descriptive this was. I didn't want to miss anything important. Then it ended with a conspiracy which is a good way to get the story moving. The only problem I have is I have not immediately developed an interest with the lead character. I hope my opinion of her changes on the next issues. :)
To a degree that disconnect with Ana was intentional. She is more an anti-hero than protagonist. (Yeah, technically the same thing, but different 'flavor') I wanted to give a feeling of unease when reading her thoughts.
That may be a mistake though. It may turn people off from continuing to the next chapter and the other characters who are more identifiable.
Her calculated view of the world allowed me to describe the setting more directly, which was one of the main reasons I started with her.
Edit: missed that you said interest instead of connection. Big difference there. I'll have to give that some thought. She is probably the most interesting character of the bunch. It would be a shame if that was lost.
nice chapter, very descriptive and I can tell a lot of thought went into it. A bit confused by some part, but I think you may have done that on purpose, anyway thanks for updating!
That may be a mistake though. It may turn people off from continuing to the next chapter and the other characters who are more identifiable.
Her calculated view of the world allowed me to describe the setting more directly, which was one of the main reasons I started with her.
Edit: missed that you said interest instead of connection. Big difference there. I'll have to give that some thought. She is probably the most interesting character of the bunch. It would be a shame if that was lost.
This is my first original story. Before this I wrote fanfic so didn't need to explain as much about the setting or characters.