Hi author:)I admire your incredible writing, it’s truly inspiring. As a concept artist, I've few dope ideas related to your story. If you’d like, I’d be love to share them with you or discuss how I can help enhance your narratives visually.Looking forward to hearing from you.

I'm loving this first chapter. For me, I really liked the use of speech; both direct and indirect. The way that you described the characters were really intriguing. I'm looking forward to the rest of the story :)