A nice start! Ilike the idea of the story being written in diary form and from two different perspectives. I'll be reading more! Some errors I noticed (only minor ones): 1. "Your only 15 wait until your 24." Your should be you're2. "She wears allot of eye liner" allot should be spelt as 'a lot'3."I do min into a cat eye" Just add an 'e' at the end of 'min' Other then that, everything looked okay to me. Hope this helps!
but really (beep)Sally and Lauren
Some errors I noticed (only minor ones):
1. "Your only 15 wait until your 24." Your should be you're2. "She wears allot of eye liner" allot should be spelt as 'a lot'3."I do min into a cat eye" Just add an 'e' at the end of 'min'
Other then that, everything looked okay to me. Hope this helps!