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JokerOfClover

Amazing story. I really like how there are two characters with parallel problems

but really (beep)Sally and Lauren

10 years agoReply

Angel Deoliveira

We encourage you to continue reading throufh. The dynamic changes almost completely by the end of chapter three.

10 years agoReply

XXjoeyXX

I like this. As someone who struggled with, and sometimes still struggles with an eating disorder its touching. Nice story line

10 years agoReply

I agree with @Nicole Armas with the grammatical errors and the story line. Keep it up :)

10 years agoReply

Nicole Armas

A nice start! Ilike the idea of the story being written in diary form and from two different perspectives. I'll be reading more!
Some errors I noticed (only minor ones):
1. "Your only 15 wait until your 24." Your should be you're2. "She wears allot of eye liner" allot should be spelt as 'a lot'3."I do min into a cat eye" Just add an 'e' at the end of 'min'
Other then that, everything looked okay to me. Hope this helps!

10 years agoReply

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