I am both frustrated and interested by the fact that this story is really short: while I would have loved to read more, I think you've managed to capture the emotions in only a few words (does that make any sense ? I am turning French expressions into English here) and you've also showed how life is short.
The ending is really nice :)
This was actually for a short-story contest on another site, but I really should extend it... I do have a rather long one in a similar-ish vein I can drop in, if y'all want it.
The ending is really nice :)