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... Nothing I could say hasn't already been said!
However, the story itself is interesting enough that I want to keep reading to find out more which is good. So near the end of the first chapter make the tension really come alive because you want your reader to keep going. They want to know whether or not the MC will be safe, who is this threat, and what not.
Overall this is a good start, good characters, and an interesting idea that I can already I think see themes of Good vs. Evil, Right and Wrong, and from the intro I believe some religious themes and morality. Keep it going and keep in mind to build your setting and flesh out characters :D