Hi,
I came across your story not long ago and was genuinely impressed by it. Your writing has a very visual quality that makes scenes play out almost like a film. Because of that, I started thinking about how effective it could be as a comic adaptation.
I'm a professional commissioned artist who enjoys collaborating with writers, and I'd love to discuss creating visuals based on your work if the idea interests you. Of course, there's no obligation, I just wanted to share how much I appreciated your story.
You can reach me on In$tagram  (luna art soul) if you'd ever like to chat.
Kind regards,Luna

ok but can you support me with a small tip, i will really appreciate it and i will also give full feedback for this, so looking forward to hear your thought?

so i just use this as a sample if you find it helpful and you will like to proceed you can kindly contact me on my gmail [email protected]

Narrative Assessment:
Your story has some lovely strengths working for it. The emotional core is clear and touching: a little girl who admires something different from herself. The dialogue feels natural, especially Niti's quiet confession about liking curly hair, that line really tugs at the heartstrings. You've also done a nice job showing the different parenting styles between the mother (practical, focused on behavior) and the father (protective, emotionally attuned), which adds a nice layer of realism.
One Suggestion:
Consider slowing down this moment just a bit to let the emotions land more deeply. For example, after Niti says, "But my own hair is straight," we might benefit from a tiny beat, perhaps the father kneeling down to her level, or Niti touching her own hair as she speaks. Small physical details like these can help readers feel the weight of the moment rather than just moving quickly through the dialogue. You might also consider showing us the mother's reaction after the father speaks, does she soften? Feel guilty? Hold her tongue? That would round out the scene nicely.
Overall, this is a warm, authentic slice of family life. With just a bit more sensory detail and emotional layering, it'll shine even brighter. Lovely work!

“I prepared feedback on the first chapter as a sample so you can see if my review style suits your needs. , my beta reading service is paid. Please feel free to share your budget so we can proceed.”but since you have only one chapter i will like to hear your thought first before i proceed.