The only thing I would suggest as I am reading is cutting down on how much you use the character's name. I don't write often in third person and you do a great job of it. It's just when the name is repeated so many times it feels choppy and repetitive.
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The only thing I would suggest as I am reading is cutting down on how much you use the character's name. I don't write often in third person and you do a great job of it. It's just when the name is repeated so many times it feels choppy and repetitive.
Otherwise, keep going! :3