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CF LAM
既然是第二季, 要求就稍提高, 你不要介意:

1. 我向親了親白狐和寧寧  >  應該係"我向白狐和寧寧親了親

2. 縫縫保保 > 應該係"縫縫補補"

3. 主角性格好像突變了似的, 連不上上季, 當然這可以解釋為惡補了帝王學, 雖然有少少怪, 但還可以接受。如果合理補發一章出發之前他努力學習帝王學的事會更好, 未睇後面, 所以唔知有冇加, 不過這不是必需

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