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榨掉葡萄乾
第一人稱和第三人稱有點混雜。

如果都改成第一人稱，感覺會更能貼近主角的心聲？
9 months agoReply
柑橘味蟑螂
好的宝子现在马上就改
9 months agoReply
柑橘味蟑螂
这章有点短，作者疯了不好意思
9 months agoReply
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