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Ragrook
@Penny~ Thank you :) If you don't mind my prodding can you point out a part that you feel should be more detailed? Don't worry you won't hurt my feelings. Just trying to see where I can improve upon more as a writer.
Penny007
I think the background of Debbie and Phillip can be elaborated a little bit more. Sometimes it is good to mention the history or previous hardships of the agents so readers can develop more interest in their future missions. But I still haven't read the next chapters, maybe I will understand the characters more afterwards. :)
Penny007
Nice plot. It seems like there will be an interesting relationship among the robot, Debbie, and Phil. Although I think some parts can be more detailed, I think it's quite easy to visualize the scenes - the holograms, numeric analyzer etc.
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