I like how you included Ten in this story. I'm not sure I would have placed him as the principal, but it's your story.

I think this first chapter should have more plot in it, I suppose. It felt too short and incomplete. Also, I want to know who the characters are, such as their personalities and whatnot, rather than what they look like. I can't say I was extremely impressed by this first chapter, which is something I think you'll need to work on because first impressions can make or break a book.

Your grammar also needs a bit of work. The way you punctuate your dialogue is wrong. It's probably best if you look up the rules online, but I'll try to explain it to you if you'd like me to.

I did enjoy the bit of humor you included, even if it felt a little out of place. It was clever.