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Overall ImpressionThis is a lovely note. The affection feels genuine, and your partner will absolutely feel loved reading it. The "letter hugs" line is especially cute, it's personal and warm.
What's Working WellTone: The voice is caring and supportive without being overwhelming.
Specificity: Mentioning a hug twice ties the letter together nicely.
Encouragement: Phrases like "You're strong, and I believe in you!" are simple but powerful.
Suggestions for ImprovementTighten a few phrases for a more natural flow:
"I know things might feel overwhelming right now, and I wish I could be there to hug you warmly." → Consider: "I know things feel overwhelming right now, and I wish I could wrap you in a warm hug." It's more active and vivid.
"Please remember that it's okay to feel what you're feeling; you're not alone in this." → This is a little formal. Try: "It's okay to feel whatever you're feeling. You're not alone." Shorter, warmer.
Add a personal touch: The letter is lovely but general. Could you slip in one small, specific detail? Maybe:
A memory you both share
An inside joke
Something you're looking forward to doing together
For example: "I keep thinking about that time we [specific memory], and it makes me smile." One tiny moment like this makes a letter feel truly for them.
Small correction: "Yours Truely" should be "Yours Truly." A common misspelling, easy fix!
Revised Version (for ideas, not to replace your voice)Here's one way to tighten it while keeping your warmth:
My Love,
I just wanted to remind you how much you mean to me, especially when things feel heavy. I know life is overwhelming right now, and I wish I could wrap you in a real hug instead of just saying it.
It's okay to feel whatever you're feeling. You're not alone in this. I'm always here, to listen, to distract you, to share the load. If you ever need to talk, I'm just a call away.
Until we're together again, imagine how good that hug will be. You're so strong, and I believe in you completely. Sending all my love and the biggest letter hugs until I can give you the real thing.
Take care of yourself. I'm thinking of you always.
Yours Truly