You have a way with your words and it's good but perhaps you should be careful with the use of punctuations and sometimes, the lack of it. The story tends to bring readers into a suspense - wondering what they're going to find only to know that it kind of hangs halfway. I'd like to know what happens after he said, "Shit." Keep it up :)
Well what happens next is they travel together, plot points. Also, thanks for the critics. It doesn't look like much but it means a lot to me so, brownie points for you!
Keep it up :)
Also, thanks for the critics. It doesn't look like much but it means a lot to me so, brownie points for you!