the style is a little hard to read, but there is also a lot of potential. The main character thinks a good bit, fitting ffor a librarian. there are a few errors I've spotted here and there, just little things. You want to hook the reader in from the begining, paint a pretty or not so pretty picture. the pacing seems pretty well so far

Hello, here's my review.The first few sentences are a bit redundant and obvious, not the strongest hook around.Within the first few paragraphs, it's good to give the reader an image or something, be it a person, place, or thing. I know that this is just the intro, but you can drop a description in here and there. You do a much better job with it in the next chapters, though it sometimes comes across as listing traits off. I'd say give us one of Andy's grandfather's stories, even if it's a condensed version to what Andy heard.As for Andy, a part of me felt like the large paragraphs were a bit tiresome, but they fit in well with his personality. He doesn't talk much, but he thinks a lot, fitting for a librarian.The pacing is fine with the overall story so far, picking up once the dialogue starts here, which is also good.