Hey! I’m Hilda, a passionate manga artist. Your story really stood out to me emotional, visual, and full of life.I’d love to work with you to adapt it into a comic.My rates are reasonable and suited for storytellers.Message me anytime: hildatrott0
Liked the idea behind the story and the story itself (thought the last sentence worked well). On the possibly needlessly picky side, thought the two paragraphs beginning with "One freezing night" could have done with a little less repetition of Susan. There was also the odd typo in there ("stripped uniform", "She holding papers"). Still, a good read nonetheless.