Your story conjures images cross between blade and true blood. The best makings of any writer are descriptive terms. How well can you describe a glass of whiskey for example? You have a nack for it. You have designed a world populated and even had foresight into the inner workings. I say the first chapter is flawless. you set up main character's life, her motivations, a look at her life, her blight and even the inner workings of her brain. I whole heartedly hope you finish your story. Dont be afraid to ask for help
Thank you so much! This really made my day ^-^ I was nervous about this being that I've never tried writing anything like this before, but I planned the hell out of it and just went for it and so I'm so glad it turned out :)
@Everleigh,Well for someone doing something for the first time, you certainly have a knack for crafting worlds. you have mange not only make me care about the main characters but also made me interested in the world she unfortunate stuck in. That is not something easily done