Critiques, right? Well, the story is really well built and quite exciting and skin-crawling. Great suspense. The phrase "object know" seems to make more sense as "object now." I dunno, just what I feel.
Not right now, I'm afraid. I just re-edited and it's complete for now. I don't have enough to string together and I have other series to work on.
It would be interesting if other people wrote their own version, or even made their own stories of the people who took the quiz and what results they got.
This is a well presented story. You were able to build the suspense and make good visuals. I suggest you can include the message on the screen again when you mention the main character was reading it out loud in the story. Great creative story!
Thank you for the comment and advice! There's actually supposed to be something else that is being said besides the main result, but I'm still thinking of what to write for that.
The phrase "object know" seems to make more sense as "object now." I dunno, just what I feel.
It would be interesting if other people wrote their own version, or even made their own stories of the people who took the quiz and what results they got.
Thank you for your comment!