Ah, this story is just so cute! Despite some grammatical errors, I really like it :D The way how you phrase the sentences, how proper it flows - especially the descriptions of their appearance and their surroundings which makes imagining easier (which you seem to have a knack in doing that haha) Good job!! xD
Thank you for that. Are there any parts in the story or characters you think I could expand upon? This is just flash fiction for now and I've been wanting to make it long enough to be called a short story.
@Monos D.O.A, In my opinion, I don't think there's anything to elaborate on as you did a good job on describing it. Not to mention, some parts should be left for the readers to wonder but if you want to expand the story, then maybe you could just insert a little flashback on how they met? When you mentioned about the deal between their parents. That's all :)
The way how you phrase the sentences, how proper it flows - especially the descriptions of their appearance and their surroundings which makes imagining easier (which you seem to have a knack in doing that haha)
Good job!! xD