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iMaGiNaRy
Hello there ! I find this really intesresting ! And the atmosphere is stressful. Well done ! I would just suggest to take care of the ponctuation. Like at least put a capital letter to every sentence's start. It would help to read more comfortably.
headinthestars
Thanks for the advice, I appreciate it. This was a rough draft, ill go in and fix it when I get the chance. Also thank you for the praise again really appreciate it. Have an amazing day.
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