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海牢
評語：整段的故事猶如在吃一個略帶驚喜的海鹽肉桂捲，滑順且帶有淡雅香味的前段讓人忍不住往下看。



但後方突如其來的情緒彷彿吃到桑葚果醬般突兀，但卻也不是不能融合，最後的收尾確實讓人意猶未盡。感謝參加
1 year agoReply
魚落井
用食物作比喻也太有趣www 因爲是從長篇截取的，所以情緒鋪墊的部分都裁掉了，難免顯得突兀 :3 感謝評語~
1 year agoReply
海牢
@魚落井,我覺得很適合w所以就用食物描述了，我很喜歡你的某些寫作手法^^
1 year agoReply
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