The intro sounded like yet another cliche romance story, but seeing Eagle in the title made me have to read it because U love eagles and call myself Eagle sometimes. This is a nice start, few problems here and there though.
A good first chapter! There was a good amount of information , not too much and not too little, on the characters and nothing is dragged out so it keeps the reader interested.
There was two spelling mistakes I found (nothing major):
1. "I watched as her sauntered to Mercedes" Just changed her to he
2."continued long it to the night" it should read as: continued long into the night.
Other then that, you have a good start here! Onto the next chapter!
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This is a nice start, few problems here and there though.
There was two spelling mistakes I found (nothing major):
1. "I watched as her sauntered to Mercedes" Just changed her to he
2."continued long it to the night" it should read as: continued long into the night.
Other then that, you have a good start here! Onto the next chapter!