Oooo, very good. I sense romance in the air. One of my only comments though is that at the beginning of ever dialect and speech, that the first word always have a capital letter, even mid-sentence. For instance, instead of a book going: She liked him so she was at a loss for words, saying, “well, I can’t tell you my feelings right now.” It goes “Well, I can’t explain my feeling to you right now.”
Still, can’t wait to see where this goes! Keep it up!
Still, can’t wait to see where this goes! Keep it up!