Alright, thank you for your comment. I'll fix the errors as soon as I can. :)

Just one little thing to start off on: Some of your words are highlighted in blue and look to be like links to other websites or something, but when I clicked on them, they just brought me back to the top of the page. I don't know if that's intentional or just an error, but you should probably fix that up so no one makes the same mistake I did. lol. Anyways, I like the idea of the story (I think I mentioned that in our PM) This was a nice little intro chapter to set the plot for the rest of the play and I can't wait to see how it turns out. It sounds very intriguing,