@Eli , It’s nothing serious. She’s been having something weird happening with her arm, so we’ve seen a few doctors about it and had a few MRI’s done. But she says the nurses have been very nice to her, so I based Nurse Holly off of them.
Woah Amelia..You submitted this entry so quickly. Like how 😂 Really great job with this story! Hope you don't mind some feedback: Just a few minor spelling errors. However, the dialogue was nicely written :) Melony is so pure and sweet. The plot twist at the end hits hard. I bet if you wrote a longer story or a book on this, the ending would be more emotional. I was just starting to get attached to her and her cute bond with Holly 😔. I especially loved that whole paragraph that begins with "It was nice, making the poor girl smile..." So wholesome! Thanks for entering!
Yeah, sorry for the spelling errors. I wrote it on my kindle and it autocorrects some things sometimes. And yeah, I probably should’ve made it longer, but I knew that I wanted to end in a plot twist.
Really great job with this story! Hope you don't mind some feedback:
Just a few minor spelling errors. However, the dialogue was nicely written :)
Melony is so pure and sweet. The plot twist at the end hits hard. I bet if you wrote a longer story or a book on this, the ending would be more emotional. I was just starting to get attached to her and her cute bond with Holly 😔.
I especially loved that whole paragraph that begins with "It was nice, making the poor girl smile..." So wholesome!
Thanks for entering!