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Wow, Hale! You knocked this one out of the park! Great research on the prompt. I'm actually very impressed. The flow of events was easy to understand, and I knew exactly what was happening. Very authentic-sounding I also really appreciate that you used "out" instead of what a lot of people use "over and out" (a great pet peeve of mine). You did a fantastic job on this. :)
Esfandiar C. Hale
Thank you so much! I was so nervous because this was my first time doing it! I'm glad you liked it :D
Only thing I might ask, is that you have a lot of harsh language towards the end. I would ask that you provide a warning at the top of your story. Other than that, I really like this one.
Esfandiar C. Hale
@Jay Ellis, Oh right, sorry I forgot to add a warning! Will edit it rn!
@Esfandiar C. Hale, Thank you, Hale. I realize a lot of people on here probably don't care. This is just for the random few who do. :)
Esfandiar C. Hale
@Jay Ellis, No, no, it's just I'm a new writer and I keep forgetting to put warnings. It was my bad. I just have this bad habit of not putting warnings that I have to get rid of -_-
@Esfandiar C. Hale, You're good. I forget myself sometimes.
Esfandiar C. Hale
@Jay Ellis, wait, hold on, am I reading this wrong did you just say you forget yourself? Like uhhh, like not knowing your existence or that even you forget to put warnings..... Jesus I need sleep. . . .
@Esfandiar C. Hale, Haha! The later. Although, there have been times where I forget that I'm an actual person in the world and not just an observer of events unfolding. That's usually when I need to go to bed, though. XD
Esfandiar C. Hale
@Jay Ellis, 🤣🤣 so we both need sleep
@Esfandiar C. Hale, Probably... Yeah, most definitely. XD
Esfandiar C. Hale
@Jay Ellis, aight I actually gotta go sleep tho so gn! Have nightmares!
@Esfandiar C. Hale, Goodnight. Please, don't have nightmares. XD
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