This was a great story. I really liked it. I was hoping for a more in depth look in to their love as well, but maybe next iteration you can fix it up. Or keep that in mind for another story.
I do want to point out that, some of your paragraphs are huge. They look like they would do better broken up in to parts. With the UI of the site and your large paragraphs, reading it was very hard and not motivating at all.
You had a pretty good flow to the story. The chatting scene was interesting and well done. Indenting the chatting scenes would create more of a dynamic atmosphere for the reader to read in. Again, that's another suggestion. You're free to take it or leave it.
Overall, excellent story. It was well written and descriptive. I'm glad to see that there was justice in the end.
Haha. I like the Morals at the end of the story :) Your story plot is well written and I think you delivered your message. I think you can add more details about how Suraj and Radhika fell in love so deeply during their online dating to make the story more emotional :)
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I do want to point out that, some of your paragraphs are huge. They look like they would do better broken up in to parts. With the UI of the site and your large paragraphs, reading it was very hard and not motivating at all.
You had a pretty good flow to the story. The chatting scene was interesting and well done. Indenting the chatting scenes would create more of a dynamic atmosphere for the reader to read in. Again, that's another suggestion. You're free to take it or leave it.
Overall, excellent story. It was well written and descriptive. I'm glad to see that there was justice in the end.