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The thing you need to be most aware of is your tendency to hope back and forth in your tenses. Sometimes you write in present tense and then you switch to past tense.

I love the WW2 setting! There is some editing that could be done though to make your writing tighter. If you'd like some suggestions, I'd be happy to help