I really enjoyed the mood and depth in your story, it paints such vivid imagery.
It made me think how powerful it could be as a visual piece or comic.
I’m involved in visual storytelling, and your work caught my attention.
Let me know if you’d like to connect.

NOTE: Rather irritatingly, the different fonts I've used to indicate which are thoughts of the narrator and what is description did not copy paste in different fonts. I'll fix that soon ):< 

This is my first ever attempt at a novel of some kind. This was written over a three month period casually, on again and off again but it is well liked I'll work on it more diligently. 

It follows the story of a band of teens who decide to make a deadly pact to kill eachother's, parents.

As I am new to this site I have accidentally written it all as the "intro" (whoops) despite the fact that it currently exists as 5 and a half chapters.

Due to the fact that the program I use is incompatible with Grammarly and I have Dyslexia, which inhibits many of my grammar skills, there are rampant mistakes which I hope you can forgive long enough to appreciate the content. I'm cross referencing it through grammar checkers currently so don't bother pointing out the errors, I'll fix them eventually.

Your criticism is greatly appreciated (: