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Comments - 《你知道嗎？我真的很討厭你》--書評/心得募集 | Penana
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墨橙
文案還挺吸引人的，只是尚未寫到轉折點。目前看到的是女主對男主的態度有點奇怪，像開場時男主就試圖自傷，且按照敘述前面已有數次先例，但在那之後好像沒看到女主對此有任何想法或情緒反應（ex.擔心），還有我有點好奇本文男主與女主朋友的病症？感覺兩人的問題相似。
剩下的就是有些無法推動劇情發展的對話或情節可以視情況刪減，個人淺見，以後請繼續加油=）
4 years agoReply
jau4jin4悠然
看來心理活動和情感表現的部分還是略顯不足呢……謝謝你啊！
4 years agoReply
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