Thank you. I didn't think it would be that good since I wrote the story on a whim after reading some comedy books about the military. 

@Folasade Bolarinwa, Your welcome, continue your story you have my support!

That was very rude, if you had spent hours writing something you though a master piece then someone can and decided to degrade you for no reason how would you feel?

@EDA ANDREWS, I would ask what they didn't like. This for example. Complete broken English. Unlikable characters. Weird looking characters. Hateable main character I mean she's just the worst. And its obvious the person who wrote this has only seen cheap anime by the way they think people act. Also the writer seems to have a weird fetish for ass slapping and asses in general. 

@Bengolong, C'mon, it's not like your stories are any better!

@EDA ANDREWS, My stories aren't full of grammatical errors. My characters are complex and have goals and desires. Does this have that? No. And Ill give you something. Your story is bad. But better than this that's for sure.