Thank you for all your notes, I'll collect them and put them at work. Yes, it's a translation cause I want to expand outside the very conservative and closed market of my country!
So, if I understand correctly, this is a translation. If I understand this page, Daith is the cadet who captures Deena for deportation. The two of them have abilities, which they do not understand. The perfect system must be maintained (by them both possibly?) The One who tries to destroy everything is the antagonist. Who is the protagonist? Daith? Deena? Did I get that right? If not, we will need to reword it. It is an exciting futuristic plot. Is Phase Harmony the subtitle? If so, put it under Humanity Chains, without the dash.
I tried to put "Phase Harmony" under the title of the saga but it wouldn’t let me. BTW, I started the editing based on your notes, but you won’t see the changes here. Only published versions will benefit from improvements.
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Yes, it's a translation cause I want to expand outside the very conservative and closed market of my country!
BTW, I started the editing based on your notes, but you won’t see the changes here. Only published versions will benefit from improvements.