Hey there! So, I really like the emotional connection in this part. The way that you described the pain that she was going through made me feel something. I felt sorry for her, what a horrible person Hendrix is! Maybe something to work on could be extending your writing a little. We get straight into the action, try building-up to when Hendrix comes along and starts messing with her. Were they in the same house together before it happened? Did he gatecrash? Just some small thoughts. Have a great day! :)
Hendrix is the kid being abused by his moms boyfriend. I sorta purposely didn't include other parts I just wanted to see how this app worked and I'm hoping to add some more of my novel. Thanks for reading.
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So, I really like the emotional connection in this part. The way that you described the pain that she was going through made me feel something. I felt sorry for her, what a horrible person Hendrix is! Maybe something to work on could be extending your writing a little. We get straight into the action, try building-up to when Hendrix comes along and starts messing with her. Were they in the same house together before it happened? Did he gatecrash? Just some small thoughts. Have a great day! :)
Thanks for reading.
Thanks for replying, i totally understand, app working OK for you? And no problem :)
My work is currently number one on the Penana charts right now. I used Social Media such as Twitter and Facebook to promote my work as well as the societies here on Penana. Finding Your Writing Buddies is a good one to post in. It's always active and full of users looking for something to read. In my free time, I also review other user's stories on here and some in return, give my works a try. That's how I got more readers.
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