Not bad. Some really great descriptions in this. I really like that you don't rely on adverbs, and instead use more active verbs. It makes your writing have more flow and action. Very well done! :)
thank you. it was a good vignette. thank you for noticing the inner mechanics. flow and action of a sports car, lol. wish i could continue but this was strictly contest.
thank you for noticing the inner mechanics.
flow and action of a sports car, lol.
wish i could continue but this was strictly contest.