I’m curious, did any of the characters surprise you and end up becoming different from how you first imagined them? Also, do you share your writing anywhere besides FanFiction?

Hi! I hope you're doing well.
I really enjoyed your story, and I wanted to share an idea. Many authors focus on writing but don't realize that visual content, like character art, book covers, or comic/webtoon adaptations can help attract new readers and keep existing ones engaged.
Just to clarify, I'm not asking for your story or any rights to it. I'm a commission-based artist, and I help authors bring their worlds to life through custom visuals that they can use to promote and grow their work.
If that's something you'd ever like to explore, I'd be happy to share my portfolio. No pressure at all!
Regards,akira
📧 Email: akiracomicart2@gm@il. com📷 Istg: akiraa_artly

You have got a very clear idea of what you want to portray to the audience, your style is very digestible and easy to know what's going on! 

A suggestion, try to avoid laundry list character physical descriptions. Instead of saying 'he had auburn hair and green eyes', maybe talk about the bags under his green eyes from a lack of sleep or something, or a nervous habit where he runs his hands through his auburn hair even though it was neatly gelled. Make their descriptions to go beyond just color and type, make them a part of your character development. I hope that made sense!

Hmmm I have mixed thoughts on this, it's written in a way that feels clean and easy to follow (good thing)
ill read the other issues a bit latter to get better idea on my thoughts for this 
keep up the good work