Again, your writing style (the sentence fragments) are very descriptive and demands the reader's attention. Be attentive of some tense confusion that happens throughout, but other than that, this is another great chapter that hooks the reader to the very next!
The flow of your writing is great, its so easy to read. The characters are developing at a great speed and the mystery is being set up well- who is Lucian and why isn't Glory allowed out!?
Your ability to turn a phrase astounds me. The first two chapters are so good at creating that slightly oppressive atmosphere. The beautiful lie. It's almost like she's joined a cult, which probably isn't too far off the mark. I can't help but be reminded of Ke$ha. It's a really good set up.
Thank you for pointing it out! :) The story on its own has several modern pop culture references so you can expect to find more of those similarities in the next chapters.
Lucian seems pretty shady to me, like he is up to no good. Any person who is that controlling obviously has something sinister up their sleeves. This a great chapter and I love the inner conflict Glory has.
I myself can't wait to get to that part but I'm afraid things would feel rushed. I mean nothing is final with NaNoWriMo but I'm just so eager to unravel the mystery like a Christmas present.
Keep writing!