This passage has a strong sense of mystery and emotion, but there are some areas where clarity and flow could be improved. The idea of Lily feeling different and lost in daydreams is engaging, and the introduction of Mia adds an intriguing twist. However, the transition from Lily’s loneliness to discovering Mia could be smoother. The sentence “At first, Lily was lost trying to remember really ho Mia is when she remembered Mia is her twin sister” is a bit unclear and could be reworded for better readability. Additionally, the ending is abrupt, making it feel incomplete. If this is meant to build suspense, a more intentional cliffhanger would make it more effective.